This is my name is Li is twenty-four years is tall and has a long,black and elegant has a small mouth and beautiful is very like likes beauty very has a big clothespress,some skirts, T-shirts,a pair of jeans,some shorts and many shoes likes eating noodles,chocolate,orange juice,bisurites and like each other.
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I want to introduce my sister to you. Her name is Li Wenjing. She is twenty-four years old. She is tall and thin. She has got long black hair. She has a small mouth and two beautiful eyes. She likes beautiful things very much. So she often goes shopping and she has bought lots of clothes. She also likes eating noodles, chocolate, biscuits and peaches. We like each other.
修改老師：Crystal 老師
四年級:李婉婷
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