This weekend ,I had a lot of fun.I got up at seven fifteen. I brushed my teeth and had some ,I went to the park with my good friends. We had a picnic there. We brought some apples,some mangoes,some sandwiches and some apples and the mangoes were sweet. The sandwiches were delicious. The juice was nice. After lunch, we began playing games. We also played table tennis. We all happly.I had a good weekend, what about you?
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I had a lot of fun this weekend.
I got up at seven fifteen. I brushed my teeth and had some food for breakfast. Then,I went to the park with my good friends. We had a picnic there. We brought some apples,some mangoes,some sandwiches and some apples and the mangoes were sweet. The sandwiches were delicious. The juice was nice. After lunch, we began playing games. We also played table tennis. We were all happy.
I had a good weekend, what about you?
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六年级:贾雯馨
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